Tuesday, October 22, 2013

100 words on a Saturday -7

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I knew it was my last day there,
My hearth and home that I was leaving behind,
Glistening eyes, mirroring my heart,
Drenching my soul in grief sublime.

Glimpses of a life less lived,
Belaboring the veneer that I hid beneath,
Exposing the despicable being I was,
Filling me with melancholy and regret.

The wheels turned and all was gone,
That last day perishing like I had,
What meaning could it hold anymore?
Those tears that could not be shed in time.

Take me back,
Turn the clock behind,
Let me live again,
And it would be right this time

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Linking back to Sugandha's prompt on write tribe for 100 words on a Saturday-7

42 comments:

  1. Lovely poem about regret and wanting to make things right.

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  2. Superb Poem, Titli :) Nicely conceptualised and well - written :) How we all wish we could live life once more !!!

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    1. Thanks Sreeja, the motivation was a young relative who squandered away the last ten years of his life and shed tears of regret on his death bed...but it was too late.

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  3. Extremely exquisite use of words blended perfectly with emotions... Brilliant one :)

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    1. Wow! Thanks a ton Alok for the lovely comment!!

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  4. Such a lovely poem dripping with melancholy. If only we could do it all again, what different choices we might make. The regret is evident, the sadness of leaving and looking back perfectly expressed. Well done!

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    1. U read so well Kathy! how often we lead our lives according to others little realising that we might regret it forever!

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  5. So poignant!
    Reminds me of the song from the Hindi film, 3 Idiots- 'Give me some sunshine; Give me some rain; Give me another chance; I wanna grow up once again...'

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    1. perfect song Anitaexplorer!!! suits it perfectly!

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  6. loved your poem, titli.
    regrets sure make us wanna go back and rewind!

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    1. they do...and i think we should make a promise to our self not to do anything that we might regret later...

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  7. It happens so many times that we want to go back and make things right. So very well put!

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  8. Beautiful composition! I so liked the last para...:)

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  9. Lovely!! The last 2 lines are heart-wrenching!

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  10. Loved this one, though I am not too keen a fan of poetry.

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    1. merci monsieur.... just coming from your blog, i am happy to read the second part of the sentence!! :)

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  11. nice concept. beautiful weave. :)

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  12. beautifully inked :) ! Take me back turn the clock too deep !

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    1. glad u liked it Ankur! and happy that u read it so well too!

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  13. A lot like life and beautifully scripted poem:)

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  14. Ah! Regrets...dont we all want to go back and make things right?

    Beautifully composed :)

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    1. thank u Namrota! makes me wonder sometimes if we could ever live a regret free life..

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  15. Loved your take on the prompt. Very well-written. Hope all of us lead more fulfilling lives so that the pain of undone doesn't hunt us in our graves.

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  16. Don't we all want a second chance? Unfortunately life doesn't offer that. Regret is the saddest thing.

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At times our own light goes out and is rekindled by a spark from another person..deep gratitude for those who have lighted the flame within me!! your comments will be appreciated..

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